Ommmmmm
the bouncing chihuahuas
of exterior life
penetrate my skull
yap yip and chew
at the ragged borders
of my bruised brain
the vise
of sharpened awareness
crunches slices tight
around my ankles
clamps me
to the floorboards
as neglected monsters
cold grey and hairless
squeal creep and slither
from under the persian rug
and every one
wants needs has to have
a piece of me
until I scream
for headroom
shriek
for silence
and
reclaim my space
of exterior life
penetrate my skull
yap yip and chew
at the ragged borders
of my bruised brain
the vise
of sharpened awareness
crunches slices tight
around my ankles
clamps me
to the floorboards
as neglected monsters
cold grey and hairless
squeal creep and slither
from under the persian rug
and every one
wants needs has to have
a piece of me
until I scream
for headroom
shriek
for silence
and
reclaim my space
2- Shannon McEwen
on Mar. 31 2007 - Edit · Delete
Very vivid, strong images, I love the yip yap of chihuahuas pentrating your skull, a fantastic description!
I think the last line should be left out for some reason, becuase the title makes me think meditation to reclaim your calm.
Life is what happens while you wait for great things.
I think the last line should be left out for some reason, becuase the title makes me think meditation to reclaim your calm.
Life is what happens while you wait for great things.
1- Leanne
on Mar. 28 2007 - Edit · Delete
Parts of this really cut, particularly the second stanza (though I'm not keen on "crunches slices tight", I'd get rid of one of the s endings). I like what you've done with the language, the "yap yip and chew" / "wants needs has to have" kind of lines -- no wasted words and the quick punches are really effective.
And I love the title!