Explicit

(not)

Simile and metaphor
Suggestive glimpse of sex
Veiled by adjective du jour
And hinted of in text

Yet sometimes phrases raw and coarse
Are needed for accession
Of fundamental bottomline
Volcanic base expression

Hard core thoughts and wanderings
Are kept with no apologies
Salacious words to spill and spread
On pages more contained than these

Unchaste deeds and blue ideas
In blatant print concealed
By boxes on a closet shelf
Selectively revealed

1- Tracey on Apr. 16 2007 - Edit · Delete

Nice "expose" of the right to express oneself in the manner best suited to the subject. From time to time I think the rhythm may be a bit off, but I'm not the best person to ask about things like that. Fun, smart piece.

2- Alcuin of York on Apr. 16 2007 - Edit · Delete

Tracey is right. The meter varies between iambs and trochees, and some even-numbered lines have only 3 beats, while S3L4 has 4. Also, accession is “to” a status or condition, not “of” one.
The poem seems to suggest that your submissions only hint at smut, while you’re keeping the really good stuff to yourself. Shame on you!
Alcuin

3- Shannon McEwen on Apr. 18 2007 - Edit · Delete

I love the last stanza. I agree that it seems to follow one pattern and then another, but unlike the educated folks I have no idea what its called and coming from someone whose iambic stinks (that would be me and not you!) I can't help much in that area.

I can only say I like the topic and the way you expressed it here.

Life is what happens while you wait for great things.

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