The Futility of Turtles
The car did not stop. Wheels
continued to spin as my father
and I looked to the curb -
the struggling turtle
attempting to work its way
back onto its feet.
Its legs, splayed to the sunlight,
flailed in the crisp breeze
of a day just beginning.
Later, I went out with Mother.
She told me stories about how
she had been dreaming
of being raped, of shooting
her husband, and as I tuned
the voice of convolution
into a studded white noise,
I began to imagine her,
on her back, her arms reaching
in futility for the sky
from the dark recesses
of her verdant shell.
I laughed (foolishly).
After all, her shell
has no color.
Ok. I was NOT expecting that. That is a killer ending.
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- stephan
One could interpret this straight-forwardly - mother psychotic, narrator sane, turtle real. On the other hand, each of these could be equally questioned, giving the reader other possibilities to imagine. In the end, we come back to the original and obvious meaning, but the imagination has been triggered. I like poems that entice that kind of exploration and thought. The metaphor is set up a bit formally, but it works very well.
Very impressive
Alcuin
Thank you all for the warm welcome.
I look forward to reading each of you.
damn.
damn damn damn.
okay it's brilliant and now I must hate you.....
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ruth
Ha! The fertility of imagination :] I was intrigued by the interplay between 'my father', 'Mother', and 'her husband' - and I enjoyed the irony implied in the concluding lines (no shell = no colour). Anyway, what I admired particularly about this was, well, the whole thing. (Perhaps it was 'fawn' *obsequious giggle*)
It is work such as this that makes me strive to improve and better my art. Poignant, daring, powerful and enigmatic...just a few words that don't quite aptly describe what I think after reading this three times. Excellent read and I don't often throw that word around either.
~Flash~