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Curb Side Confession
Did I tell you about the time I died
Of course not
I’m dead
I can’t tell you anything
All I can do
Is let you imagine
Well
The line after this says it all
. . .
© 2008, Mosquitobyte
Anstey on Jul. 24 edit · delete This is pretty interesting actually. I am not sure about whether i think it completely works or not, but I think it works enough for me.
Mosquitobyte on Jul. 25 edit · delete Thanks Stephan. Oriiginally, I planned to have a much longer piece with this. Then I got to the last line and got stumped for a while. It dawned on me as I thought about progressing the piece, that the "white noise" ending was the only one that really fit my philosophy, so stuck with that.
I agree, it works, though not the way one would expect and not quite how I originally concieved it.
Mos.
