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have mercy
hands hold grief
in fingers pulse, and
trace the circles on your skin
each turn a prayer
please mother mary
awaken
no comfort held in pity
calm my fears
have mercy
my face in your hands
drowning,
have mercy
the screams will come
mary carry me in your embrace
I am afraid
have mercy
again
Colleen on Jul. 24 2008 edit · delete I am not familiar with this singer/songwriter so I may be missing the connection there however I find this poem can stand on its own.
one thing I liked most was the idea of "each turn a prayer" to mother, to awaken, to calm .. and the way "have mercy" repeats with each tracing of the circle and then the last line "again" I found your poem to be very visual and well done.
Anstey on Jul. 25 2008 edit · delete I like the sort of Kyrie-Hail Mary crocheting of words. It's pretty interesting to me. I felt like there are some connections that aren't quite there, but it's probably just me. THe line that i liked best was L7 - the pity line. However, I really wished you tied it back to the hands a tiny bit more. It seemed somewhat disjointed to me.
