Adoration

Just a short poem.

Bright haloes of golden cream

ring round God’s whisper.

Sunrise.

Norm on Sep. 5 2008 edit · delete

Man, that is lovely.

Colleen on Sep. 5 2008 edit · delete

Laurie.. I really like this.. "ring round God's whisper."

Anstey on Sep. 5 2008 edit · delete

golden haloes
around God's whisper:

adoration.

Laurie on Sep. 5 2008 edit · delete

Thank you for the comments Norm and Colleen.

Stephan, is that a suggestion for a re-write? Or just an echo of how you would have expressed the poem contents?

Anstey on Sep. 5 2008 edit · delete

echo. I just noticed how that worked both ways.

Aphasic on Sep. 17 2008 edit · delete

God's golden cream
whispers bright sunrise

infatuation

Isn't that amazing Anstey? It works in so many ways...

but they escape me - I prefer Laurie's original.

Anstey on Sep. 17 2008 edit · delete

I prefer hers too. I was just sayin'

words. interesting stuff. them things.

Aphasic on Sep. 18 2008 edit · delete

Of course - how grossly imperceptive of me. In my defence, I call a dearth of interesting words :>

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