Comment: her last mood ring

Dear Colleen - reading your poem, and feeling the dreaminess near the end- I wanted to change the word "proof" to

 

"poof" (!)

 

and in this way giving the feeling of a sudden

magical like realization!

I like a lot of this but not the word "Son"

I wish somehow you could give a sense of mystery in a different way-

or else just say "sun".

It is a matter of taste, for sure.

Yes, every time I read it- I wish it was "Poof-

she was once more pefectly whole,"

Thanks, I enjoyed thinking about your poem!