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Hi Jasmine,
Honestly, I'm not sure. I do like what you have here. I just wasn't sure where you were going with those last 2 lines. It reads fine to me as it is now, but if there was an idea you were going for with those last 2 I think you could still develop it. Sorry, that doesn't sound too helpful huh?
I am looking forward to meeting you next week at the poetry festival.
Colleen
by Colleen on Oct. 4 2008