Comment: Mosaic Mama Memories

I very much like many parts of this - but just for the sake of giving you some constructive criticism (since that's the point here!)

• The picture in the middle, purely for layout reasons is distracting and makes it hard to read.

• The ending detracts poetically, but as a tribute is marvelous. Now this is just my personal opinion, but after an entire poem of 'showing' isntead of 'telling' the sudden shift to the imperial tone seemed unsuited there at the end.

• There is absolutely no 'technical' reason for this particular thought, but I wonder if it might read better if the first stanza more closely matched the others. A bit of paring down there or possibly breaking it into two bits, might work a little more smoothly i think.

• the line breaks are surprisingly effective.

nice job.

• stephan