Comment: With Regard to Those Boys Unrefined

Great poem, though we might have to give you the moniker 'misanthrope'. This is very powerful, and though the iambic quart tends to be singy-songy - a characteristic of the form - you've handled it very well indeed. The passion comes through clearly. S6L2 is awkward, the iambic inflections unnatural. It stands out like a sore thumb because all the other lines are so spot on. I think that minor thing is the worst that can be said about this write.
Well done!
Alcuin